Revise The Two Emails Below To Remove Problematic Content

Revise The Two 2 Emails Below To Remove Problematic Content And Help

Revise the two (2) emails below to remove problematic content and help these students construct polite, effective email messages instead. Scenario 1: Susan is unhappy with her grade in her college class. She wants to clarify what she can do to improve in the course. She also feels frustrated about the many hours she is spending studying and writing papers. She decides to email her professor; however, before she hits SEND, she asks you, her friend, to take a look at the email.

Reading the email, you note a lack of civility, polarizing language, and other unethical language (given the context). Help Susan rewrite her email so she can express her concerns over her grade politely and ask for help from the professor. Susan’s Email: (No greeting) I want to know why my grade was so bad. I spent hours finding sources and writing that paper and it was graded unfair. My friend wrote her paper the night before it was due and got a better grade. I know most professors grade hard but this is ridiculous. I felt good when I submitted the paper but now I feel like crap. I guess I am going to fail. (No closing)

Scenario 2: Don is worried about passing his college class due to some low grades. He wants to ask his professor for help to pass the class. He decides to email his professor; however, before he hits SEND, he asks you, his friend, to take a look at the email.

Reading the email, you note a lack of civility, poor manners, and poor grammar in Don’s email. Help Don rewrite the email so he can express his concerns and appropriately seek help from the professor. Don’s Email: (No greeting) Yo teach. I dunno no way to pass this class. What I gotta do to pass? (No closing) Instructions: Revise both emails.

Create two (2) new email messages of one to two (1-2) paragraphs each for a total of two to four (2-4) paragraphs. Create an appropriate greeting and closing for each email. Target the appropriate professional audience. Use appropriate language for a professional audience. Use appropriate email formatting.

Follow appropriate netiquette rules for electronic communication. Meet the 100-to-200-word minimum requirement for each email revision. Use correct sentence mechanics, grammar, spelling, punctuation, and style. Your assignment must follow these formatting requirements: Be typed, single-spaced, using Times New Roman font (size 12), with 1-inch margins on all sides. Check with your professor for any additional instructions.

Paper For Above instruction

Effective communication via email, especially in academic environments, requires a tone of politeness, clarity, and professionalism. Revising Susan and Don’s emails to meet these standards enhances their chances of receiving constructive responses and fosters respectful dialogue. This paper presents the revised versions of their emails, emphasizing civility, clear language, and appropriate email etiquette.

Revised Email from Susan:

Subject: Request for Guidance on Improving My Course Performance

Dear Professor [Last Name],

I hope this message finds you well. I am writing to discuss my current grade in your class and seek your advice on how I might improve my performance. I have been dedicating considerable time to researching sources and writing assignments, and I am eager to understand how I can better meet the course expectations. If possible, I would appreciate any feedback or suggestions you could provide to help me succeed in the course.

Thank you very much for your time and assistance. I look forward to your guidance.

Sincerely,Susan [Last Name]

Revised Email from Don:

Subject: Seeking Assistance to Pass the Course

Dear Professor [Last Name],

I hope you are doing well. I am reaching out because I am concerned about my ability to pass the class based on my current grades. I want to improve my understanding of the material and work toward passing the course. Could you please advise me on the steps I should take or resources I might use to improve my performance? I am eager to learn and do my best to succeed.

Thank you for your support and guidance. I appreciate your time.

Sincerely,Don [Last Name]

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