Classification Essay by Kelechi Onyekwere Submission date: 07-Jul-:34PM (UTC-0400) Submission ID: File name: temp_turnitintool_.Classification_Essay_Onyekwere.docx (19.52K) Word count: 648 Character count: 3395 Hello! 1 Thesis sh Develop idea Clarify i Con Vary sentence st Format citation to m Ending paragraphs 5 Format cita Develop idea Clarify ideas 6 7 Revise citatio 404 Error 0% SIMILARITY INDEX 0% INTERNET SOURCES 0% PUBLICATIONS 0% STUDENT PAPERS Exclude quotes Off Exclude bibliography On Exclude matches

Overall, you organize your topic into categories throughout and provide examples of those characteristics in your essay. Also, you attempt to use evidence throughout to support your ideas. Some suggestions I've made include eliminating titles in text, revise your title itself, explain how the evidence supports your claim. Also, you'll need to use parenthetical citations in MLA style (there are some areas where you should revise, and others where you do not need to). In addition, many of your paragraphs are quite short and should be organized according to the assignment instructions.

I look forward to reading more of your work! -JV Hello! My name is J.V. I hope these comments will assist you as you continue to learn about the writing process. I look forward to reading your work! QM QM QM QM QM QM Comment 1 | Format Do not bold title/make sure to use upper and lower-case letters/name your paper something other than the assignment title :) Thesis should be one sentence | Thesis Whoops, make sure your thesis is one single sentence in length.

Here is a helpful resource for revising your thesis. Comment 2 | Format You don't need to use titles in text in MLA style. Please go through and delete these. I did not mark all areas. Comment 3 | Grammar Try varying your sentences a bit throughout your essay.

Comment 4 | Language Do you mean "Drew"? *Develop ideas further | Support Here, you could develop this idea much further. Think about this: How does this situation/event/evidence support my idea/claim? How can I use this idea to connect to my claim? How can I help readers see the connection between this event and my thesis? Clarify ideas | Language Maintain the use of vocabulary specific to the scientific topic throughout your response.

Then, proofread all sentences to be sure you are communicating your ideas clearly. Connect to claim | Support This part is difficult to connect to your claim. Explain how this example shows what you are being asked to write. Vary sentence structures | Grammar Look at the length of your sentences in this section. Are they all very short or very long?

Revise this sentence to be make sure you have both complex and simple sentence structures. Additional Comment There are many areas where you begin sentences with, "examples include". Try varying your sentences as this is a bit repetitive. *Format citation to meet MLA style | Research QM You should punctuate/format your citations correctly (here's a link to MLA In-Text Citations Basics). Also, here's an example: Paraphrase: ...and then the economy would flourish (Smith 45). Direct quote: "...and the economy would do well" (Smith 45).

Or, you'll use part of the name of the article (1-3 words) if there is no author, like this: ("Global Warming" 562). No page numbers: ("Global Warming"). Always place the period at the end of the parenthetical citation. In addition, make sure to add the page number if your source is a downloadable file with Ending paragraphs with evidence | Support Instead of ending a paragraph with evidence, explain how the evidence supports your claim, or thesis. Comment 5 | Organization QM Please go through and revise your paper to use the five-paragraph essay format.

Many of your paragraphs are quite short and should be organized according to the assignment instructions. *Format citation to meet MLA style | Research You should punctuate/format your citations correctly (here's a link to MLA In-Text Citations Basics). Also, here's an example: Paraphrase: ...and then the economy would flourish (Smith 45). Direct quote: "...and the economy would do well" (Smith 45). Or, you'll use part of the name of the article (1-3 words) if there is no author, like this: ("Global Warming" 562). No page numbers: ("Global Warming").

Always place the period at the end of the parenthetical citation. In addition, make sure to add the page number if your source is a downloadable file with QM QM QM QM *Develop ideas further | Support Here, you could develop this idea much further. Think about this: How does this situation/event/evidence support my idea/claim? How can I use this idea to connect to my claim? How can I help readers see the connection between this event and my thesis?

Clarify ideas | Language Maintain the use of vocabulary specific to the scientific topic throughout your response. Then, proofread all sentences to be sure you are communicating your ideas clearly. Comment 6 | Research Do not bold/use upper and lower-case letters Comment 7 | Research Each citation should include the location of the source (for example, if you found this source somewhere on the web, you'll need to include the link) Revise citation | Research This citation is incorrect and/or missing information. Readers need to be able to trace each piece of evidence back to its original source. Revise the citation so the source is properly cited.

404 Error | Research Similar to the “404 Error†on a website, this writing appears to provide non-existent or inaccurate information about sources. Readers need to be able to trace each piece of evidence back to its original source. Revise the citation so the source is properly cited. RUBRIC: ENG 102 MH V3 CLASSIFICATION_D THESIS INADEQUATE BELOW AVERAGE AVERAGE ABOVE AVERAGE SUPERIOR SUPPORT INADEQUATE BELOW AVERAGE AVERAGE ABOVE AVERAGE SUPERIOR ORGANIZATION Average Thesis & Focus: Thesis, central idea, audience, purpose, digressions Lacks an identifiable thesis. Limited or no awareness of audience and purpose.

Readers cannot discern the essay’s central idea. Thesis was attempted but unclear and/or inconsistently addressed. Reveals limited awareness of audience and purpose. Central idea either lacking or inconsistently addressed. Thesis is identifiable, but perhaps too narrow, too broad, or otherwise problematic.

Awareness of audience may be adequate but inconsistent. Central idea is perhaps too general and supported by irrelevant examples. Thesis is established and is consistently addressed throughout most of the paper. Awareness of audience is sufficient. Central idea is clear and maintained in most of the essay.

Thesis is clearly established and maintained throughout the entire paper. Paper demonstrates a sophisticated awareness of audience and purpose. Central idea/focus maintained throughout. Below Average Thesis support, thesis development, use of examples, logic, and reason No support of thesis with relevant facts, examples, reasons, or evidence. No topic development.

Little-to-no classification present. Topic development is flawed or non-existent. Support is minimal, logically flawed, and/or inaccurate. Topic may be illogically classified, and classifications may not be supported by evidence. Topic development may have been attempted, but does not form conclusions and/or fails to exhibit clear reasoning.

More support is needed. Some examples may be vague. Topic is classified, but classifications may not be completely supported by evidence. Some irrelevant support may be present, but most evidence supports thesis. Support is sufficient but perhaps flawed in some way.

Topic is logically classified, and classifications are supported by evidence. Examples are sufficient. Thesis is supported and developed in most paragraphs. Essay completely supports the thesis with logical arrangement of evidence. Topic is logically classified, and classifications are supported by very strong evidence.

Examples are excellent. All assertions are supported and relate to thesis. Above Average INADEQUATE BELOW AVERAGE AVERAGE ABOVE AVERAGE SUPERIOR LANGUAGE INADEQUATE BELOW AVERAGE AVERAGE ABOVE AVERAGE SUPERIOR COHERENCE & ORGANIZATION: INTRODUCTION, CONCLUSION, BODY PARAGRAPHS, TRANSITIONS, TOPIC SENTENCES No clear introduction, body, or conclusion. Little-to-no transitions. Demonstrates little-to-no understanding of organization.

Many sentences within paragraphs do not relate to each other and/or the paragraph’s topic. May contain no discernible topic sentences. Introduction, body, and conclusion attempted but problematic. Few transitions. Perhaps numerous digressions.

Mostly missing or problematic topic sentences. Demonstrates little understanding of organization. Identifiable introduction, body, and conclusion; yet one significant weakness is present: undeveloped introduction, undeveloped conclusion, illogical paragraph order. Adequate transitions, perhaps some digressions. Some paragraphs may lack clear topic sentences.

Demonstrates basic understanding of organization. Clear introduction, body, and conclusion although improvements could be made. Most paragraphs have clear topic sentences. Essay establishes a clear plan of development. Transitions are clear throughout most of the paper.

Demonstrates good understanding of organization. Clear and effective introduction, body, and conclusion: Introduction establishes the essay’s main idea, and conclusion summarizes thesis and main ideas without merely copying and pasting from the introduction. Clear and effective transitions are present throughout the paper. Demonstrates excellent understanding of organization. Average Language & Style: Word choice, repetition, redundancy, awkwardness, article misuse, wrong word form (their/there, etc.), typos/misspellings, vocabulary May contain more than 6 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness.

May contain more than 6 errors in inappropriate language for academic audience. Fails to demonstrate competent language use; sentences and vocabulary are inappropriate, facile, and/or incoherent. May contain 6 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness. May contain 6 errors in inappropriate language for academic audience. Contains repetitive, incorrect, and/or insufficient sentence structure and/or limited vocabulary.

May contain 4 – 5 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness. May contain 2 – 3 errors in inappropriate language for academic audience. Demonstrates competency with language use but sentence constructions and vocabulary may be limited or repetitive. May contain 2 – 3 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness. May contain 2 – 3 errors in inappropriate language for academic audience.

Demonstrates sufficient knowledge and skill with varied sentence construction and vocabulary. Unnecessary repetition is minor. SUPERIOR GRAMMAR INADEQUATE BELOW AVERAGE AVERAGE ABOVE AVERAGE SUPERIOR PUNCTUATION INADEQUATE BELOW AVERAGE AVERAGE ABOVE AVERAGE SUPERIOR FORMAT INADEQUATE May contain 1 error in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness. May contain 1 error in inappropriate language for academic audience. Demonstrates sophisticated knowledge and skill with varied and complex sentence construction and vocabulary.

Little-to-no unnecessary repetition. Above Average Grammar: Fragments, subject-verb agreement, verb tense errors, verb form errors, run-ons, pronoun agreement Contains more than 5 different grammar errors. The identical 3 – 4 errors may be repeated throughout. Contains 4 – 5 different grammar errors. The identical 2 – 3 errors may be repeated throughout.

Contains 2 – 3 different grammar errors. The identical 1 – 2 errors may be repeated throughout. Contains 1 grammar error, which may be repeated throughout the essay. Contains either no grammar errors, or 1 – 2 different errors with no repetition. Superior Punctuation & Capitalization: Comma errors, comma splices, apostrophe errors, capitalization errors, semicolon errors, colon errors Contains more than 5 different punctuation/capitalization errors.

The identical 3 – 4 errors may be repeated throughout. Contains 4 – 5 different punctuation/capitalization errors. The identical 2 – 3 errors may be repeated throughout. Contains 2 – 3 different punctuation/capitalization errors. The identical 1 – 2 errors may be repeated throughout. Contains either no punctuation/capitalization error, or 1 – 2 different errors with no repetition. Average Format: heading, title, margins, spacing, length, underlined thesis, other assignment-specific required elements *Length for Classification is 500 words minimum Doesn’t meet formatting requirements: Formatting may be missing four or more elements (either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or margins, or thesis not underlined). Length may not meet minimum requirements. BELOW AVERAGE AVERAGE ABOVE AVERAGE SUPERIOR RESEARCH INADEQUATE BELOW AVERAGE AVERAGE ABOVE AVERAGE SUPERIOR Doesn’t meet most formatting requirements: Formatting may be missing three elements (either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or margins, or thesis not underlined).

Length may not meet minimum requirements (an essay that does not meet length minimum will score no higher than 3 in this category) Meets some formatting requirements: Formatting may be missing two elements (either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or margins, or thesis not underlined). Length may not meet minimum requirements (an essay that does not meet length minimum will score no higher than 3 in this category) Meets most formatting requirements: Formatting may be missing one element (either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or margins, or thesis not underlined). Length meets minimum requirements. Meets all requirements.

Formatting is appropriate in terms of heading, title, margins, spacing, underlining thesis. Length meets minimum requirements. Below Average Source minimums, incorporation of sources (including use of signal phrases), use of research to argue topic, MLA in-text quote formatting, Works Cited list. This paper requires at least one source. Source minimum requirements are not met.

Research is insufficient, irrelevant, or inadequate. Sources are not incorporated at all, or are done very poorly. Five or more errors in documenting sources using MLA style may be present. Works Cited page may contain significant formatting errors, and some sources may be omitted from the list. Source minimum requirements may not be met (Note: If source minimum is not met, the essay will score no higher than 2 in this category).

Research is superficial and/or sources are incorporated poorly. No more than four different errors in documenting sources using MLA style may be present. These identical errors may be repeated. Works Cited page may contain significant formatting errors, but all sources are listed. Source minimum requirements are met.

Research may be superficial, sources may be poorly incorporated. No more than three different errors in documenting sources using MLA style may be present. These identical errors may be repeated. Works Cited page may contain significant formatting errors, but all sources are clearly listed. Source minimum requirements are met.

Fairly thorough research with mostly effective use of sources. No more than two different errors in documenting sources using MLA style. These identical two errors may be repeated. Works Cited Source minimum requirements are met. Thoroughly researches the topic, uses sources effectively.

No more than one different error in documenting sources using MLA style. This identical error may be repeated. Works Cited page may contain minor formatting errors, but all sources are clearly listed.