Reading Respond Paragraph Development Exercise 1

Reading respond Paragraph Development Exercise 1. Read

Read through the handout “Paragraph Development” before starting this exercise. An effective paragraph has a controlling idea that is related to the thesis in some way. For example, if my thesis is that Brent Staples effectively fulfills his purpose in his essay, “Just Walk on By,” then my body paragraphs would develop this idea.

Sample topic sentence: One way Staples fulfills his purpose for this essay on racial discrimination is by showing rather than commenting on his experiences. In this way, he elicits the audience’s sympathy without asking for pity.

I’ve provided below for you a paragraph that merely summarizes what happens and does not contain a topic sentence. Revise this paragraph by adding a topic sentence, adding sentences that expand the topic sentence, and creating clear links between evidence (use of direct quotation) and purpose (why are you quoting this?). Or create your own brand new paragraph.

He starts off by giving his readers an example of his first racist encounter. A woman who was walking far in front of him, immediately assumed he was a mugger, a rapist, or a murderer. Staples knew what she was thinking. He writes, “After a few quick glimpses, she picked up her pace and was soon running in earnest.” After this event, Staples became well aware of his presence to others.

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The paragraph provided lacks a clear controlling idea and does not effectively connect the evidence to its purpose. To improve this paragraph, it is essential to introduce a clear topic sentence that states the main idea and then support it with specific evidence linked directly to the purpose. For instance, one could revise the paragraph to emphasize how Staples’s experience exemplifies the prejudice he faces and how he uses this to illustrate a broader point about racial discrimination.

A possible revision begins with a topic sentence such as: Staples effectively conveys the prejudice inherent in racial profiling through a vivid recounting of his first racist encounter, which elicits empathy and illustrates the dangers of stereotypes. This sentence clearly states the paragraph's main idea and connects it to the larger thesis about racial discrimination.

Following this, the paragraph elaborates on the event: Staples describes how a woman saw him as threatening based solely on appearance, which reflects societal biases. Including the direct quote, “After a few quick glimpses, she picked up her pace and was soon running in earnest,” vividly illustrates her fear-driven reaction and highlights the automatic assumptions made based on race or appearance. Here, the quote supports the idea that stereotypes lead to unjustified fear and discrimination.

To deepen the analysis, the paragraph should explain why this example is significant. For example: “This incident exemplifies how racial stereotypes can lead to immediate fear and avoidance, reinforcing societal divisions and personal victimization.” Connecting the evidence to the purpose demonstrates critical understanding and makes the paragraph cohesive.

In conclusion, a well-structured paragraph linking the specific incident to the broader theme of racial prejudice would strengthen the argument. The paragraph would then not only summarize Staples’s experience but also analyze its significance, fulfilling the purposes of paragraph development in persuasive or analytical writing.

References

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