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Revise The Two 2 Emails Below To Remove Problematic Content And Help

Revise The Two 2 Emails Below To Remove Problematic Content And Help

Revise the two (2) emails below to remove problematic content and help these students construct polite, effective email messages instead. Scenario 1: Susan is unhappy with her grade in her college class. She wants to clarify what she can do to improve in the course. She also feels like venting her frustrations to her professor due to the many hours she is spending studying and writing papers. She decides to email her professor; however, before she hits SEND, she asks you, her friend, to take a look at the email.

Reading the email, you note a lack of civility, polarizing language, and other unethical language (given the context). Help Susan rewrite her email, so she can express her concerns over her poor grade politely and ask for help from the professor. Her original email: (No greeting) I want to know why my grade was so bad. I spent hours finding sources and writing that paper and it was graded unfair. My friend wrote her paper the night before it was due and got a better grade. I know most professors grade hard but this is ridiculous. I felt good when I submitted the paper but now I feel like crap. I guess I am going to fail. (No closing)

Scenario 2: Don is worried about passing his college class due to some low grades. He wants to ask his professor for help to pass the class. He decides to email his professor; however, before he hits SEND, he asks you, his friend, to take a look at the email.

Reading the email, you note a lack of civility, poor manners, and poor grammar in Don’s email. Help Don rewrite the email, so he can express his concerns and appropriately seek help from the professor. Don’s original email: (No greeting) Yo teach. I dunno no way to pass this class. What I gotta do to pass? (No closing)

Instructions: Revise both emails.

Create two (2) new email messages of one to two (1-2) paragraphs each for a total of two to four (4) paragraphs. Create an appropriate greeting and closing for each email. Target the appropriate professional audience. Use appropriate language for a professional audience. Use proper email formatting. Follow appropriate netiquette rules for electronic communication. Meet the 100-to-200-word minimum requirement for each email revision. Use correct sentence mechanics, grammar, spelling, punctuation, and style. Your assignment must follow these formatting requirements: Be typed, single-spaced, using Times New Roman font (size 12), with 1-inch margins on all sides. Check with your professor for any additional instructions.

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Certainly! Here are the revised emails following professional communication standards, civility, and clarity.

Revised Email from Susan to Professor

Subject: Request for Guidance on Improving My Course Performance

Dear Professor [Last Name],

I hope this message finds you well. I am writing to respectfully inquire about my current grade in the course and to seek your advice on how I might improve my performance. I have been dedicating considerable time and effort to my studies, and I am eager to understand where I might focus more to meet the course expectations. Any feedback or suggestions you could provide would be greatly appreciated.

Thank you for your time and assistance. I look forward to your guidance and am committed to working hard to improve my understanding of the material.

Sincerely,

Susan [Last Name]

Revised Email from Don to Professor

Subject: Request for Assistance in Passing the Class

Dear Professor [Last Name],

I hope you are doing well. I am writing to ask for your guidance on how I can improve my standing in the course. I am concerned about my current grade and would appreciate any advice or resources you could suggest to help me succeed. I am committed to putting in the necessary effort and would be grateful for any support or recommendations you can provide.

Thank you very much for your time and understanding. I look forward to your response.

Sincerely,

Don [Last Name]

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