This Week You Will Identify A Common Editing Concern
This Week You Will Identify A Common Editing Concern That You Have Su
This week, you will identify a common editing concern such as passive voice, apostrophes, commas, or fragments. Review this week’s reading from The Kaplan Guide to Successful Writing and the Writing Center resources in this week’s Grammar Lab to learn more about that error, or find another resource on the internet. Then, discuss how the resource you selected helped to clarify any questions you had. Finally, provide some examples of corrections you made to your draft (or another component of the portfolio) after reviewing this material. Demonstrate to your classmates how to fix those comma splices and passive voice sentences.
To conclude your post, discuss any other challenges you face as you revise and edit your draft this week and prepare the presentation component of your final project. Your post should be approximately words. I have attached both my draft and changes to help with this discussion.
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The process of revising and editing academic writing is crucial for clarity, coherence, and grammatical accuracy. This week, I focused on addressing passive voice, which I realized was overused in my initial draft. Passive constructions can obscure the subject performing the action, making sentences less direct and sometimes confusing. To better understand and correct passive voice issues, I reviewed the relevant sections from The Kaplan Guide to Successful Writing and supplemented this with resources from the Purdue Online Writing Lab (OWL), which provided clear explanations and examples of active versus passive voice.
The Kaplan Guide emphasized that active voice tends to make the writing more engaging and straightforward. It pointed out that passive sentences often result from a tendency to focus on the action rather than the actor, which can weaken the argument or message. The resource clarified that transforming passive sentences into active ones involves identifying the subject that performs the action and restructuring the sentence accordingly. For example, “The experiment was conducted by the researchers” becomes “The researchers conducted the experiment.” This clarification helped me evaluate my draft more critically and replace passive sentences with active constructions where appropriate.
Applying this new understanding, I revisited my original draft and identified several passive voice instances. One example was, “The data was analyzed by the team,” which I revised to “The team analyzed the data.” This correction made the sentence more direct and concise. Additionally, I encountered comma splices—errors where two independent clauses join with a comma alone. For instance, I had written, “The results were significant, they indicated a strong correlation.” To fix this, I replaced the comma with a period or a semicolon, resulting in “The results were significant. They indicated a strong correlation,” or “The results were significant; they indicated a strong correlation.” Demonstrating these corrections to my classmates helps reinforce my understanding of proper sentence structure and punctuation.
Beyond grammatical concerns, I am also facing challenges in effectively organizing my ideas logically. During revision, I find it helpful to read my draft aloud to catch awkward phrasing and gaps in coherence. As I work on the presentation component of my final project, I am attentive to clarity and visual engagement, ensuring that my speech complements my written work. Balancing content quality with delivery poses a challenge, but I plan to rehearse and seek feedback from peers to improve.
In conclusion, focusing on active voice and correct comma usage has improved my editing process, making my writing clearer and more impactful. By reviewing credible resources, I gained practical strategies for identifying and fixing common grammatical errors. I will continue to refine my draft by addressing other editing concerns, such as sentence variety and transitions, to produce a polished final piece. These editing practices not only enhance my current project but also develop my overall writing skills for future academic work.
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