Week 7 Assignment 4: Email Revisions Due And Worth 10

Week 7 Assignment 4 Email Revisions Due Week 7 and Worth 100 Points

Week 7 Assignment 4: Email Revisions Due Week 7 and Worth 100 Points

Revise the two (2) emails below to remove problematic content and help these students construct polite, effective email messages instead. Scenario 1: Susan is unhappy with her grade in her college class. She wants to clarify what she can do to improve in the course. She also feels like venting her frustrations to her professor due to the many hours she is spending studying and writing papers (which may or may not be a good idea). She decides to email her professor; however, before she hits SEND, she asks you, her friend, to take a look at the email.

Reading the email, you note a lack of civility, polarizing language, and other unethical language (given the context). Help Susan rewrite her email, so she can express her concerns over her poor grade politely and ask for help from the professor. Susan’s Email: (No greeting) I want to know why my grade was so bad. I spent hours finding sources and writing that paper and it was graded unfair. My friend wrote her paper the night before it was due and got a better grade. I know most professors grade hard but this is ridiculous. I felt good when I submitted the paper but now I feel like crap. I guess I am going to fail. (No closing)

Scenario 2: Don is worried about passing his college class due to some low grades. He wants to ask his professor for help to pass the class. He decides to email his professor; however, before he hits SEND, he decides to ask you, his friend, to take a look at the email.

Reading the email, you note a lack of civility, poor manners, and poor grammar in Don’s email. Help Don rewrite the email, so he can express his concerns and appropriately seek help from the professor. Don’s Email: (No greeting) Yo teach. I dunno no way to pass this class. What I gotta do to pass? (No closing)

Paper For Above instruction

Effective professional communication, especially via email, is essential in academic and professional settings. Proper email etiquette, including a courteous tone, appropriate greetings and closings, clear language, and respectful framing of concerns, helps foster positive interactions and increases the likelihood of receiving helpful responses. The following are revised versions of the students' emails, demonstrating how to express their concerns politely and professionally while adhering to email etiquette rules.

Revised Email from Susan

Subject: Request for Guidance on Improving My Course Performance

Dear Professor [Last Name],

I hope this message finds you well. I am writing to inquire about my recent performance in the course and to seek your guidance on how I might improve my understanding and grades. Despite investing significant effort in researching sources and preparing my assignments, I was disappointed with my recent grade. I am eager to identify areas where I can develop further and would appreciate any suggestions or resources you could recommend. I value your feedback and am committed to doing my best in the course.

Thank you very much for your time and assistance. I look forward to your response.

Sincerely,

Susan [Last Name]

Revised Email from Don

Subject: Request for Assistance in Passing the Course

Dear Professor [Last Name],

I hope you are doing well. I am reaching out to discuss my current standing in the class, as I am concerned about my ability to pass. I have been struggling with some of the material and low grades on my assignments. I would greatly appreciate any guidance or suggestions you could offer on how I might improve my performance and meet the course requirements. I am committed to putting in the necessary effort and would be grateful for your support.

Thank you very much for your understanding and help. I look forward to your advice.

Sincerely,

Don [Last Name]

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