Revising Paragraphs With Circular Reasoning
Revising Paragraphs with Circular Reasoning Paragraph 1 : The percentage of Americans who shop online is growing for a number of reasons. People are buying a lot of items from Internet sites. All ages of people shop online, so online shopping will only increase.
Revise the following paragraphs to eliminate circular reasoning and improve clarity and coherence.
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The original paragraphs discuss the growth of online shopping and the value of summer jobs for adolescents. However, both contain instances of circular reasoning, where the conclusion is restated as a reason, or points are made that do not independently support the claim.
In the first paragraph, the statement that online shopping "will only increase" because "all ages of people shop online" is circular. It suggests that since people already shop online across all age groups, the trend will naturally continue to grow, but this reasoning does not substantiate why the percentage grows or what factors influence this growth. To improve this, one could add data or reasons explaining why online shopping is increasing, such as technological advancements, convenience, or marketing trends.
The second paragraph claims that having a summer job "teaches adolescents some valuable life lessons" and is beneficial for future success. However, the phrase "there are many situations that students will experience" and the assertion "students should try to get some work knowledge before graduating" restate the initial benefit without providing specific examples or evidence. To strengthen this paragraph, it should include concrete examples of lessons learned during summer jobs and how these lessons influence future decisions or behavior, avoiding the circular statement that these experiences are valuable because they teach lessons.
Effective revision involves replacing circular assertions with evidence, examples, and logical reasoning. For instance, the first paragraph could cite research showing increasing online sales or factors driving growth, while the second could include examples of skills gained during summer employment and their impact on adolescents' future success.
In conclusion, eliminating circular reasoning enhances the clarity and persuasiveness of these paragraphs. Providing supporting evidence and specific examples anchors the claims in factual or logical foundations, making the arguments more compelling and academically rigorous.
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